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RE: chugga1time Application EDIT 3 - Saera - 07-22-2012
Your story just seems really random, the run on sentences doesn't seem to help either.
If you read some of the accepted applications, even fairly short ones can be very meaningful. The objective isn't exactly the length of your story, but the content of it, think if the readers would enjoy reading it like a story.
RE: chugga1time Application EDIT 3 - chugga1time - 07-23-2012
Thanks I will do a rewrite it should be better
RE: chugga1time Application EDIT 4 - chugga1time - 07-23-2012
It has been redone completely Saera hope you like this one more
RE: chugga1time Application EDIT 4 - Saera - 07-24-2012
Welcome to Kiwike.