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Application- Red11
03-31-2012, 07:26, (This post was last modified: 03-31-2012, 21:40 by Red11.)
Post: #1
Application- Red11
General

Minecraft Name:Red11
Previous RP experiences: Fallout 3
Have you played on any other servers? Why did you leave?: No.
What feature of Kiwike are you most interested in?: Raids, territories
How did you hear about Kiwike: ASDF

Character

Character Name: Noah
Spawn Location (Khulu Desert, Orraku Fields, Icenfjord, Aridian Jungle): Orraku Fields
Gender: Male
Age: 28

General Background Information: Noah: The Dragon Slayer

As the morning sun rose over the distain mountain range of Anew, Noah and his family strolled into the town. It was a beautiful day. The birds sang, the leave slightly rustled, and the critters of the forest began to stir. This was particulary Noah’s favorite part of the day. He excitedly rushed to the bakery, with his mother and father trailing behind him. As usual, Noah used his good manners and his natural charm to get a warm, crispy piece of bread from the baker. As his parents did their shopping in the square, Noah chased a squirrel, unknowingly, all the way to the dark side of the forest.


His mother and father strictly told not to venture in that part of the forest, not even near it. And Noah only remembered this rule when he found a pair of red eyes staring at him from the shadows. The creature gave a low growl. Noah growled back playfully, not seeing the danger in those cold, menacing, eyes. It was only when he saw a ball of fire extend its burning arm from the forest, leaving a mark on Noah’s hand. It was the small yelp of pain Noah gave that alerted Noah’s parents. They could recognize the sound anywhere. They rushed to the sound, but they were too late to save him.


The creature in the depths of the forest leaped out of the shadows, going for a killer blow that would end Noah’s life. That was, until, Noah’s mother took the menacing strike straight to the back. Annoyed with the distraction, the dragon continued to pursue his main prey. With a whoosh, the dragon soared into the sky. Not wanting to endanger the innocent citizens in the town, Noah ran to the river where he and his father loved to fish. The dragon, amused that Noah decided to run to a confined place, was distracted, and miscalculating his trajectory, he landed in the river. While the dragon was temporarily dazed, Noah took those precious seconds to hide under a rock. But it was no use. The dragon had an amazing sense of smell, and instantly homed in on his target.


Then the whooping noise began. The noise continued then on into the forest, with the dragon following behind it. “Father!” Noah shouted. Shouting was no use, because when he emerged from the cover of the rock, he saw the flying beast heading towards the Anew Mountains with a struggling figured clutched in its claws.


Noah had no choice but to reluctantly go back to his mother’s corpse. Instead of finding a corpse, Noah found his mother alive, holding on to life with a struggle. “noah,” She croaked. With a deep breath, a grit of the teeth, she continued. “F-f-find him. F-f... you have to...” “Find who, mother?” “Find Reamen.” “Yes, mother. I will.” “Noah. I l-l-love... yo-” She had surrendered to death. Noah wept and wept. He slept by her at night. Eventually, he buried her by the river. Now, he had to get revenge. But going out into the world unarmed and with no knowledge was suicide. Yes, he had to find Reamen.


In the days that followed, Noah had gotten a job at the bakery, and since the baker had a very strong liking for the boy, he had accepted Noah into the family. After 6 years, Noah was a strong, intelligent, young man. Age 24 to be exact. He then ventured out into the world, after saying goodbye to the kind baker.
He came upon Kiwike, a continent, and a moment after entering a city, he fainted from fatigue. He woke up in a strange house, with mystical items everywhere. A man entered the room. Not even saying hello, Noah asked, “Do you know a man named Reamen?” And the man replied,”Oi, he is standing right in front of you.”


Once they met, Noah told about his mother and father, and the incident. Reamen, understanding his feelings, took Noah under his wing. Reamen taught Noah in every aspect of survival, combat, and potions. They even got a little spell casting done. Reamen bonded with Noah, and they became great friends. But all friendships, eventually, have to end.


After hearing an ear splitting roar, Reamen and Noah ran out the front door, only to find the dragon. The one that killed Noah’s mother, and took his father. Stunned, Reamen stared at the dragon, and was eaten whole, in a split-second.
Anger fueled Noah, and after a long battle, he slayed the dragon. He got his revenge, but still didn't find his father. So he set off on a quest, and he didn't think he was coming back.

At that moment, a new fire started in his heart. He decided that from now on, he will not only find his father, kill all the dragons, and get revenge, but he will also stop the dragons from hurting anyone else, just as they did to him as a boy.

Physical Condition/Description (what do they look like, what do they wear, all physical elements of a character): Dirty, curly hair, grim expression. He wears leather armor.

What is your character's main objective? What do they wish to gain out of this experience of living?: He wants to find his father and kill the dragons.

Picture of your minecraft skin: Skin is being made right now. D:
[Image: Red11.png]

Please, when writing your application, take your time and be sure to
03-31-2012, 07:33, (This post was last modified: 03-31-2012, 07:34 by squiggley1.)
Post: #2
RE: Red11's lore: Dragon Slayer
really well done and all but... Saera is going to rape you D: ....

You wot?
03-31-2012, 07:35,
Post: #3
RE: Red11's lore: Dragon Slayer
Good job, but make sure to rename the thread "Application- Red11" Smiley

Love,
Gecko
03-31-2012, 07:38,
Post: #4
RE: Red11's lore: Dragon Slayer
Saera dont got nuthin on him.



03-31-2012, 19:22, (This post was last modified: 03-31-2012, 19:26 by Sebiale.)
Post: #5
RE: Application- Red11
He thinks his father is still alive? WaitAMinute
Even if the dragon didn't kill him by some miracle, the guy is over a hundred years old, his father should be dead of old age anyways.


Slayed should be slew.
It's the second time I've seen that mistake today. The application has other issues, but that's the one that annoys me the most. Tongue



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03-31-2012, 19:41,
Post: #6
RE: Application- Red11
(03-31-2012, 19:22)Sebiale Wrote: He thinks his father is still alive? WaitAMinute
Even if the dragon didn't kill him by some miracle, the guy is over a hundred years old, his father should be dead of old age anyways.


Slayed should be slew.
It's the second time I've seen that mistake today. The application has other issues, but that's the one that annoys me the most. Tongue
Hmm... I guess I didn't think about that. I threw this together in 20 minutes.

03-31-2012, 20:43,
Post: #7
RE: Application- Red11
It was quite captivating in the beginning, but then it trailed off at the end of the background story. And yes, I'd love it if you give more thought about the possibilities of Red finding his father.

Your application will be on hold until then.

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03-31-2012, 21:22,
Post: #8
RE: Application- Red11
(03-31-2012, 20:43)Saera Wrote: It was quite captivating in the beginning, but then it trailed off at the end of the background story. And yes, I'd love it if you give more thought about the possibilities of Red finding his father.

Your application will be on hold until then.
Yeah, It would've been better at the end, but my bro got mad at me making it more "story" like. So I just made it simple. I'll rewrite it right now, and hopefully it'll meet your standards. Laugh


ME GUSTA! :MeGusta:
03-31-2012, 21:23,
Post: #9
RE: Application- Red11
Good story Red11! Hurry and fix!

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03-31-2012, 21:35,
Post: #10
RE: Application- Red11
Fair enough. You are accepted now.

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