application - clobber1

[Naamandre3]

Well.. i see no difference from you're post now then before but i might be wrong.
I'm going to give you a list of pointers i would like you to work out.

general background wise:
- This grumpiness is this a sickness? explain some more about it
- Where is the land of dunholm?
- How did you're father know about kiwike, or why did he send you there.
And if you're char does not know that
- Why did he follow the words of his father?
- how long did the journey take, what did he learn?

Objective and description are fine tho.
So edit those points and you'll be done!