Application - toon13956824

[toon13956824]

is it okay if i just change the age?

General Background Information:

once upon a time there was a guy,
with the code name toon13956824
He Grew up in a poor village
where he had to work hard
When he was 10, his village was Attacked by the most horrible creatures Such As
creepers, zombies, skeletons, ...
he, his family and friends Could escape to a cave where he lived eight years.
When he was discovered by an army and forced to fight They Were
Against the creatures.
he was the best and was soon Appointed to Captain,
war-hero.
1 year later there was a large creature with wings,
it was indestructible, he saw his friends, family
Death.
He tore a piece of his clothes and made ​​it red with blood,
or his family and friends,
and swore that one day he would take revenge and he disappeared
after days of walking,
he found a new country called kiwike.
hoping he would get a second chance.