In Retrospect

[Riskae]

((It's really good just this one part bothers me though:

"A strong magical presence can be detected by anyone who would visit the spire, but not many could detect the hidden entrance to a separate dimension, a pocket dimension if one knew what that was."

You change tenses and that makes it sound a bit off, maybe something like this would be better:

"A strong magical presence can be detected by anyone who visits the spire, but few detect the hidden entrance to a separate dimension, a pocket dimension if one knew what that was."

But yeah, I liked it. ))