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In Retrospect
08-13-2012, 17:45,
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RE: In Retrospect
(08-08-2012, 04:50)Riskae Wrote: ((It's really good just this one part bothers me though:

"A strong magical presence can be detected by anyone who visits the spire, but few detect the hidden entrance to a separate dimension, a pocket dimension if one knew what that was."

((I'd think "but few can detect" would be a bit more fitting. and I apologize for forgetting my parenthesis))
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In Retrospect - by CapBubba - 08-06-2012, 22:54
RE: In Retrospect - by Saera - 08-07-2012, 15:11
RE: In Retrospect - by CapBubba - 08-07-2012, 21:48
RE: In Retrospect - by Riskae - 08-08-2012, 04:50
RE: In Retrospect - by CapBubba - 08-08-2012, 06:00
RE: In Retrospect - by Saera - 08-13-2012, 17:45
RE: In Retrospect - by Cerce - 08-21-2012, 00:05
RE: In Retrospect - by sethd13 - 08-21-2012, 02:13

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