Applications-GoldenAge13

[partyars]

Your story seems a bit flat to me, try to add more to it, flesh it out a bit.

Your main objective is really simple, there's nothing wrong with that but is that the only thing you want to do with your character? Perhaps add something in the likes of helping people because you're a medic after all.

Your skin description also seems a bit more like a skin used in a different timestamp, This world is settled in a medieval/steampunk era, maybe try to adapt your skin to this or add an explanation to why your character wears a modern red shirt. And the description doesn't fit the given skin as well (no red shirt)


and one more thing I found: Kiwike isn't an island, it's more like a land or a world.