Application - GoldenSurfer

[GoldenSurfer]

Minecraft Name:GoldenSurfer
Previous RP experiences: Kiwike, Kiwike 2.0
Have you played on any other servers? Why did you leave?: all the others are boring
What feature of Kiwike are you most interested in?: Territories
How did you hear about Kiwike: My friend RedRover

Character

Character Name: Syb
Spawn Location (Khulu Desert, Orraku Fields, Icenfjord, Aridian Jungle): Orakku Fields
Gender: Male
Age: 13

General Background Information: GoldenSurfer was a little robot. on a day did he run away to a new world. He found a server named kiwike. He tought that he can start over here in the new world. He got lots of friends and became a nice member of the server. He is a respect and nice robot. he is better then the other robots. On a other day he be attacked by others. he did not expect that. He runned away and didn't came back that lonely day.

Physical Condition/Description A metalic dutch robot with a evil meter and a battery on his back of his head. he can suck all types of blocks in his big mouth. he also can jump higher than others and is stronger then obsidian. The Dutch robot

What is your character's main objective? He wants to build a hole community and live with lots of friends in a nice town. In Peace

Picture of your minecraft skin: i can't find it i had it on skinindex but its gone. i have it on

[Naamandre3]

There is nothing wrong against playing a robot but let me give you some pointers on whats wrong with this application.

First of all in roleplay terms there is no 'server' kiwike. Kiwike is a world.
Second you just wrote you found kiwike and made alot of friends. This pretty much makes you know everybody out of the blue which we do not like. we encourage you to find people in the world and not magically 'know' all of them. The other robots currently are yottabyte,droid and stargatenerd (Sorry if i miss some other robot!). And if they attacked you you have to ask them for permission cause it would involve there story aswell.

Finally, you cannot be stronger then obisidan or jump higher. cause all players are limited to the minecraft jump hight and you will take as much damage as someone else. so that part makes no sense.

You basically have to re-write the bio to make more sense

You can show you're picture by doing this.
http://kiwike.se/skin/YOURNAME.png

for you it would be http://kiwike.se/skin/GoldenSurfer.png

[GoldenSurfer]

but what do i need to tell in general background

[Naamandre3]

You tell the history of the person.
How he ended up the way he is right now.
Why he moved or was created here etc etc.

Fix that, and the errors i pointed out in the post above and you should be good

[GoldenSurfer]

i don't get it why a general background

[Naamandre3]

Cause we want people to show they put effort into creating their character.
And ontop of that, it shows people are capable of explaining were there character has been untill kiwike.
Cause everybody has done something before they went or appeared on kiwike

[geckosquid]

Although you were accepted on grounds of your begging endlessly for it, I want you to fix this, please.