Application - Exepito

[Exepito]

General

Minecraft Name: Exepito
Previous RP experiences: World of Warcraft
Have you played on any other servers? Why did you leave?: Haatfilms guest server
What feature of Kiwike are you most interested in?: War
How did you hear about Kiwike: Trough Lordgodfrey

Character

Character Name: Tony Kaizer
Spawn Location (Khulu Desert, Orraku Fields, Icenfjord, Aridian Jungle): Icenfjord
Gender: Male
Age: 54

General Background Information: Tony is a alchemist and has been making potions since he were 14, he started then in his dads secret laboratory undergrown. He needs a special mask to survive oxygen after an experiment he did when he was 23. Tony were born in Kiwike and raised by his father since his mother died during the birth. Tony might seem like an miserable and bitter man because of that, he is not afraid to get hurt or maybe die in his experiments. He does not want to hurt anyone tough.

Physical Condition/Description (what do they look like, what do they wear, all physical elements of a character): Tony is always wearing his Gas mask that he needs to survive oxygen after an experiment when he was 23 years old. He also wears his brown jacket and striped pants. Tony is an bitter man and hes difficult to communicate with. He likes alchemy with Redstone and Potions and is very interested in the Nether world.

What is your character's main objective? What do they wish to gain out of this experience of living?: Tony wants to explore all potions and powers possible for a humans life. He also want to try to create new monsters to experiment on them.

Picture of your minecraft skin (Should fit your character description):

[MainDigger]

You need to write more on the background.
For example, how did he find Kiwike?
Also, how does one enjoy cigars with a oxygen mask on?

[Crashlander04]

Kinda lacks fleshing out - you have a good amount of detail in the two sentences in your background but the story lack any depth.

As a connoisseur of sorts in the subject of fine smokeries as well as having basic knowledge of both the principles of combustion and the respiratory system, I can't see how you could inhale anything (even smoke) without bringing oxygen into your system (or breath at all without coming in contact with oxygen seeing as all cells need it to survive). Also, does smoking cigars not completely negate the point of having a special mask to stop contact with oxygen?

[sethd13]

maybe he has a lower tolerance dor oxygen

[Exepito]

You need to write more on the background.
For example, how did he find Kiwike?
Also, how does one enjoy cigars with a oxygen mask on?

I Fixed it now

[Saera]

Could you maybe describe this experiment that caused him to wear a mask. That might flesh out the story a bit more and make it better.