Application- (colemertz)

[ColeMertz]

General

Minecraft Name: colemertz
Previous RP experiences: I have been playing on a RP tekkit server for the past 6 months.
Have you played on any other servers? Why did you leave?: I have played on a whole mess of servers, never really found one that was truly good, I hope this one will change that.
What feature of Kiwike are you most interested in?: Probably faction warfare.
How did you hear about Kiwike: Ian25

Character

Character Name: Cole Mertz
Spawn Location (Khulu Desert, Orraku Fields, Icenfjord, Aridian Jungle): Orraku Fields
Gender: Human, male
Age: 30

General Background Information: Cole was born into a family of war fighters, from the time he was born all he could remember was the slaughtering of the heretic that his empire fought, by the time he was 12 he could wield a sword as good as any older fighters. When he reached the age of 18 he was quickly drafted into the military, thus he began his life long career in fighting. During a assault on an enemy stronghold, his commander and father was shot in the throat, causing severe internal bleeding, when he died, Cole took his red cloak off him and went on an absent without leave, never returning to his homeland. He now travels the world as a mercenary getting work where work is needed. Cole prefers open field warfare against recognized military groups and does not accept jobs against plebs and such.

Physical Condition/Description (what do they look like, what do they wear, all physical elements of a character): Cole dresses usually in standard BDU's, nothing flashy, except for the cloak on his back that represent's his home empire. He has a beard with brown, shaggy hair and stands at a average 6 feet 2 inches with a blank look on his face.

What is your character's main objective? What do they wish to gain out of this experience of living?: As any war fighter would want, Cole would want the glory and heroism. But with all that aside man is always interested in wealth.

Picture of your minecraft skin (Should fit your character description):

[theonedoctor]

Hey man you gotta add more to ur backround story i mean it reallys is just lacking a lot. Actually make a story with a climax or something and with a resolution that usually gets people in

[Leech]

It's pretty good, although I expect the whitelisters will want you to expand on your character's main objective. Also, your skin should match your description

[ColeMertz]

I know my story was half-assed but why did you say my description didn't match the skin o_O

[Saera]

I thought the description and skin are fine.

You just need to flesh out on your story a little more and you are good to go.

Also, don't forget to post at http://www.minecraftforum.net/topic/1135...ry13972356

[ColeMertz]

There, I expanded the story abit and updated the op

[theonedoctor]

Alright looks much better but why did he leave when his commander died? I would put in that the commander was his father or something because that would create grief and your character couldve left because he could not stand returning home withought his father

[ColeMertz]

I hate the same story in minecraft rp app's saying "Mah parents are deaded so I ran awayz" but i'll but it in anyways just for the sake of it making more sense lol

[Saera]

Haha well I didn't think that father part was necessary.

Welcome to Kiwike.