Application - jjthejr1

[Flowerburn]

General

Minecraft Name: jjthejr1
Previous RP experiences: I have played on small one but nothing big.
Have you played on any other servers? Why did you leave?: they shut down due to the owner having no time to play.
What feature of Kiwike are you most interested in?: The nations and how people are able to make their own nation.
How did you hear about Kiwike: Minecraft forum.

Character

Character Name: Kristen
Spawn Location (Khulu Desert, Orraku Fields, Icenfjord, Aridian Jungle): Khulu
Gender: Female
Age: 17

General Background Information: Her village she grew up in was attacked when she was only 15 by hordes of men wreaking havoc. she was forced to run for her life. She survived off the land. She was taught how to use the bow and gather food at an early age by her father. She doesn't know if she was the only one who made it out of her village and she hopes to make a new life in Kiwike.

Physical Condition/Description (what do they look like, what do they wear, all physical elements of a character): She is slim but still has muscle, brown hair, and is very skill full with the bow. She could run miles on end and love to adventure anywhere. She wears a red hood and cape green eyes and has a golden charm that use to be her mothers that she always wears.

What is your character's main objective? What do they wish to gain out of this experience of living?: She hopes to survive and able to live in a good community.

Picture of your minecraft skin (Should fit your character description):http://www.minecraftskins.com/newuploaded_skins/skin_2012062609455440658.png

[Saera]

I think your story could be fleshed out a little more. For instance, did she ever attempt to try to find her family or village members? How exactly did she find her way to Kiwike? Or was her village already in Kiwike?

Also, don't forget to post your application at http://www.minecraftforum.net/topic/1135...d__st__180 as well.

[geckosquid]

I swear these apps are all the same... In addition to Saera's feedback, does your character have any more... Ehh... specific goals?

[sethd13]

(just make up some teary story about finding your parents)

[smellityet]

I swear these apps are all the same... In addition to Saera's feedback, does your character have any more... Ehh... specific goals?

The only time when somebody's life is actually different is if their life is actually normal or doesn't have to do with bad guys burning down villages.

[geckosquid]

I swear these apps are all the same... In addition to Saera's feedback, does your character have any more... Ehh... specific goals?

The only time when somebody's life is actually different is if their life is actually normal or doesn't have to do with bad guys burning down villages.

Doesn't seem to hard of a formula to break, but oh well. A whitelister's lament.

[sethd13]

It's all a reference to Nova.

[smellityet]

I swear these apps are all the same... In addition to Saera's feedback, does your character have any more... Ehh... specific goals?

The only time when somebody's life is actually different is if their life is actually normal or doesn't have to do with bad guys burning down villages.

Doesn't seem to hard of a formula to break, but oh well. A whitelister's lament.

[Insert random name found at baby names website] 's [family, village] was [attacked, burned, pillaged] at only age [insert young age here]. S/he ditches her [family, village] and there's a 0.00% chance s/he saves anyone or any of her/his family members are alive. It just so happens that s/he can [use a bow, use a sword, use a knife, hunt, stab random strangers in the back without wincing, make a camp fire] because (her, his) father taught (her, him). S/he wants [revenge, find out who dun it, cookies].

Here's the formula!

Anyways, back on topic; try to make your story better either in terms of detail or a story that is more unique.