RE: Aplication rudii20
That's a little too brief of a background. Could you elaborate a little more, as well as your background? And I'm sure your objective can be stated in more than 2 words.
Well its getting there, but a little more perhaps for the background? And a bit more details on the device that your character invented that he used to teleport? Also I meant to also say a bit more description of your character, more than white hair and a lab coat. Sorry I forgot to mention that in my previous post.
But so far, your objective/goal is good.
When you are done editing, post a reply stating that you edited so I can keep track.
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