application - clobber1

[clobber1]

Minecraft name: clobber1
Previous RP XP: SAMP - grand theft auto san andreas RP server
I have also played kiwike in the passed.
i play evocraft. leaving that because friends told me this is good, and it looks good.
kiwike ships and building nations looks cool
i heard through a couple of friends

Character name: GrumpyOlDenholm
Spawn location: Orraku fields
Gender: Male
Age: 22
General background information: left the land of the denholms due to mass suicide, i am the last remaining denholm. the whole area was blown into a crater, there is nothing left of the land. i was forced to leave the land and everything was gone, nothing left. there was a mass depression in my last land, due to grumpiness. this led to the mass explosion of the family creepers. i never trusted them but they all thoguht i was superstitious but in the end, i was right. my fathers dying words were 'travel to the land of kiwike, there you will happiness.'
The denholms are a wookie tribe.
Characters main objective: to find true happiness in the land of kiwike to forget about my depressing upbringing.
Physical condition: I am a wookie, so very hairy, large and grumpy. i dont wear anything as i am a wookie.
Skin:

[Naamandre3]

General background is to short and needs to be longer.
Where is denholms, what does it look like? What race is he denholms doesn't sound to human. why is he grumpy what caused it, why did he come to kiwike to find happiness. there's alot of things missing here.

You also don't have a picture of you're minecraft person.
you should add that in using the format given in the application sheet

[Saera]

Don't forget to copy your application on minecraftforum.net at:
http://www.minecraftforum.net/topic/1135...ry13972356

[clobber1]

Minecraft name: clobber1
Previous RP XP: SAMP - grand theft auto san andreas RP server
I have also played kiwike in the passed.
i play evocraft. leaving that because friends told me this is good, and it looks good.
kiwike ships and building nations looks cool
i heard through a couple of friends

Character name: GrumpyOlDenholm
Spawn location: Orraku fields
Gender: Male
Age: 22
General background information: left the land of the denholms due to mass suicide, i am the last remaining denholm. the whole area was blown into a crater, there is nothing left of the land. i was forced to leave the land and everything was gone, nothing left. there was a mass depression in my last land, due to grumpiness. this led to the mass explosion of the family creepers. i never trusted them but they all thoguht i was superstitious but in the end, i was right. my fathers dying words were 'travel to the land of kiwike, there you will happiness.'
The denholms are a wookie tribe.
Characters main objective: to find true happiness in the land of kiwike to forget about my depressing upbringing.
Physical condition: I am a wookie, so very hairy, large and grumpy. i dont wear anything as i am a wookie.

[Saera]

I didn't mean copy it here again, and you need to work on your application, do as Naam suggested.

[clobber1]

I didn't mean copy it here again, and you need to work on your application, do as Naam suggested.

i did work on it once, but i edited the original instead of replying with changes, what else do i need to put on it to make it acceptable, i worked the original improvements

[Naamandre3]

Well.. i see no difference from you're post now then before but i might be wrong.
I'm going to give you a list of pointers i would like you to work out.

general background wise:
- This grumpiness is this a sickness? explain some more about it
- Where is the land of dunholm?
- How did you're father know about kiwike, or why did he send you there.
And if you're char does not know that
- Why did he follow the words of his father?
- how long did the journey take, what did he learn?

Objective and description are fine tho.
So edit those points and you'll be done!

[clobber1]

Minecraft name: clobber1
Previous RP XP: SAMP - grand theft auto san andreas RP server
I have also played kiwike in the passed.
i play evocraft. leaving that because friends told me this is good, and it looks good.
kiwike ships and building nations looks cool
i heard through a couple of friends

Character name: GrumpyOlDenholm
Spawn location: Orraku fields
Gender: Male
Age: 22
General background information: left the land of the denholms due to mass suicide, i am the last remaining denholm. this land is in the far south-west from kiwike several weeks away by foot. the whole area was blown into a crater, there is nothing left of the land. i was forced to leave the land and everything was gone, nothing left. there was a mass depression in my last land, due to grumpiness. the grumpiness was caused by a lack of fun on the lands and people slowly started to resent each other over time. this led to the mass explosion of the family creepers. i never trusted them but they all thoguht i was superstitious but in the end, i was right. my fathers dying words were 'travel to the land of kiwike, there you will happiness.' to this day, i have no idea why my father told me to come here, but i will keep searching until i find the cause of my being here as i have always trusted in the words of my father and as they were his last words, they must hold some importance. the journey took about a week in some of the harshest weathers turning from frozen tundra to harsh deserts in a matter of hours, i was forced to abandon my pet chinchilla who had been with me for as long as i could remember in hope that it could survive on its own.
The denholms are a wookie tribe.
Characters main objective: to find true happiness in the land of kiwike to forget about my depressing upbringing.
Physical condition: I am a wookie, so very hairy, large and grumpy. i dont wear anything as i am a wookie.
Skin:

[Saera]

That'd do.

However, I can't figure out why your skin isn't appearing. Is your minecraft username correct? The name is case-sensitive for the skin display.

Also, don't forget to post your application at http://www.minecraftforum.net/topic/1135...ry13972356

[clobber1]

Minecraft name: clobber1
Previous RP XP: SAMP - grand theft auto san andreas RP server
I have also played kiwike in the passed.
i play evocraft. leaving that because friends told me this is good, and it looks good.
kiwike ships and building nations looks cool
i heard through a couple of friends

Character name: GrumpyOlDenholm
Spawn location: Orraku fields
Gender: Male
Age: 22
General background information: left the land of the denholms due to mass suicide, i am the last remaining denholm. this land is in the far south-west from kiwike several weeks away by foot. the whole area was blown into a crater, there is nothing left of the land. i was forced to leave the land and everything was gone, nothing left. there was a mass depression in my last land, due to grumpiness. the grumpiness was caused by a lack of fun on the lands and people slowly started to resent each other over time. this led to the mass explosion of the family creepers. i never trusted them but they all thoguht i was superstitious but in the end, i was right. my fathers dying words were 'travel to the land of kiwike, there you will happiness.' to this day, i have no idea why my father told me to come here, but i will keep searching until i find the cause of my being here as i have always trusted in the words of my father and as they were his last words, they must hold some importance. the journey took about a week in some of the harshest weathers turning from frozen tundra to harsh deserts in a matter of hours, i was forced to abandon my pet chinchilla who had been with me for as long as i could remember in hope that it could survive on its own.
The denholms are a wookie tribe.
Characters main objective: to find true happiness in the land of kiwike to forget about my depressing upbringing.
Physical condition: I am a wookie, so very hairy, large and grumpy. i dont wear anything as i am a wookie.