Choklad's application

[Choklad]

General

Minecraft Name: Choklad
Previous RP experiences: WoW, Garrys mod, SAMP, Byond's verision of Dungeon Masters, Lotro, Mabinogi, Kiwike 1.0, Kiwike 2.0, Vindictus, The elder scrolls-Oblivion, The elder scrolls-Skyrim, The elder scrolls-Morrowind
Have you played on any other servers? Why did you leave?: No minecraft servers
What feature of Kiwike are you most interested in?: Kiwiships
How did you hear about Kiwike: I was one of the people constructing the idea of Kiwike. Then corruption made it in to the server and kicked everyone who rebelled against it.

Character

Character Name: Will Hayes
Spawn Location : Orraku Fields
Gender: Male
Age: 24

General Background Information: Will grew up with his mother and his father in a house close to the beach. His father was a fisherman, or atleast Will thougt so, his father was a fiercy pirate. His mother lived at the house cleaning the house doing the laundry and making dinner. As a kid Will worked at a windmill, delivering flour to the bakers. He did it for the extra gold, because hes family wasn't very rich because his father wasn't the best pirate out there, but they were happy with their life.

When will was about 17 years old, he came home from the windmill. He couldn't find his mother or father in the house, then he looked outside a window and he saw a small boat on the beach and a person sitting there. He ran towards this person at the beach as fast as he could, discovering that it was his mother sitting with his father in her knee. She was crying and his father was all pale. She told Will that his father wasn't a fisherman, and she told everything about his life as a pirate.

-He only did it too support us, the salary as a fisherman is not very good. This time he must have taken water over his head. I saw this boat coming up the shore this morning...
Will's father had a bullet hole in his chest, with blood poured out.

After all this will decided that he must follow in his fathers footsteps becoming a thief of the seas, a pirate. To honour him ofcourse and seeking revenge on those who killed him. But he wasent so succesfull with this he had no clues, nothing. And to support his mother with gold. He bought a little ship with the family savings and put on his fathers old clothes. And started to sail the seas. After sailing for some years he stopped by a tavern ordering a bottle of beer. And then he heard a voice
-Make that two beers, ill pay. He looked to the right and there sat an old man he was wearing a red coat and a black hat, he also had a black eyepatch over his eye.
Will and the mysterious man talk for a while and became quite good friends. Will told the man about himself and what had just happend.
The man then asked Will to sail the seas with him, to become true blooded pirates. So Will and his mentor set sails towards a land called Kiwike...


Physical Condition/Description (what do they look like, what do they wear, all physical elements of a character): Will is wearing his old fathers clothes its a black hat and a red coat and brown pants and black old boots, and a golden belt. He has blue eyes, and a brown beard. He has been sailing for some years so he is quite strong. But he is mentaly scarred because of his past.

What is your character's main objective? What do they wish to gain out of this experience of living?:
Will wants to find out who killed his father.

Picture of your minecraft skin :

[squiggley1]

YEEEEEEEESSSSSSSSS FINALLY A PIRATE!!!!!!!!!!

[Naamandre3]

Everything seems fine except one thing.
You never stated where he is now or where this conversation takes place.
is it in the inn of kiwike? Or does he meet the person someone else and goes to kiwike with him?

And on a more practical note, if he sails with him and teaches the kid. how do people get to meet him if he's not played by someone else?

You have to clear that up.

[Choklad]

Everything seems fine except one thing.
You never stated where he is now or where this conversation takes place.
is it in the inn of kiwike? Or does he meet the person someone else and goes to kiwike with him?

And on a more practical note, if he sails with him and teaches the kid. how do people get to meet him if he's not played by someone else?

You have to clear that up.

The Inn is in no specific place, and the man that he meets is John Silver, TheCreator's character but I didn't think I needed to include that.
Anyways, they set sail in the land of Kiwike and by now it's the current time.

It seems that you are asking more of people who actually try to make up a story than the ones who doesn't really bother. Seems abit unfair if you ask me, since all we want to do is to get online and Roleplay.

[Saera]

We don't have high hopes for those who don't really bother. We do try to push them, and sometimes it turns out way better than before. For others, after 4-5 attempts you kind of have to know when to stop.

But reading a really good lore makes us want to see how far you can make the story even better. And you don't need too many changes, just a couple of clarifications, like how you and your mentor sailed the seas till you found the land of Kiwike.

Also, if you haven't already, post your edited application at http://www.minecraftforum.net/topic/1135...ry13972356

Oh also, welcome to Kiwike.

[Naamandre3]

The Inn is in no specific place, and the man that he meets is John Silver, TheCreator's character but I didn't think I needed to include that.
Anyways, they set sail in the land of Kiwike and by now it's the current time.

It seems that you are asking more of people who actually try to make up a story than the ones who doesn't really bother. Seems abit unfair if you ask me, since all we want to do is to get online and Roleplay.

I'm just asking cause i like to know. a background should be somewhat bullet proof other people try to write a story as well. but some are not as talented in it as you might be.
Like Saera pointed out. By pointing out flaws and errors we strive to see who cares to improve it and show dedication and if we can make it some better as well.

I did not mean to offend you or make you think i ask more of you just because can roleplay.
i was just doing my job